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Sarah, a teen with a port-wine stain and body image issues, is abducted, and must find a way to rescue herself.

“Powerful. I raced through it, wanting to know if Sarah would find a way to escape both her captor and her self-doubts. A real nail-biter!“
- April Henry, NY Times bestselling author of The Girl Who Was Supposed to Die

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Kendra must face her past and stop hurting herself--before it's too late.

Awards: #1 in the Top 10 ALA Quick Picks, ALA's Rainbow List, a Governor General Literary Award Finalist, Staff Pick for Teaching Tolerance.

Yes, it's my own arm on the cover of SCARS.

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Caitlyn, a telepath in a world where having any paranormal power at all can kill her, must decide between saving herself or saving the world.

Awards: A finalist for the Monica Hughes Award for Science Fiction and Fantasy, and the Ruth and Sylvia Schwartz Award.

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Kate sees visions of the future--but only when she has an asthma attack. When she "sees" her sister being beaten, and a schoolmate killing herself, Kate must trigger more attacks--but that could kill her.

Awards: 2013 Gold Winner, Wise Bear Digital Awards, YA Paranormal category.

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Sarah, a teen with a port-wine stain and body image issues, is abducted, and must find a way to rescue herself.

“Powerful. I raced through it, wanting to know if Sarah would find a way to escape both her captor and her self-doubts. A real nail-biter!“
- April Henry, NY Times bestselling author of The Girl Who Was Supposed to Die

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5 Tips on Using Details: Use Details to Bring Your Story to Life

by Cheryl Rainfield, 2003

The right details can make your characters and settings seem more real, more alive, even more interesting. But loading your story down with detail can put your reader to sleep.

How do you decide what details to use and when? Here are some tips to help you:

  1. Use details that will stand out to the reader, or that describe an object, setting, or person in a specific way. Try to pick details that will stay with the reader. For instance, maybe your character notices that her friend's lipstick is on crooked, or that her hand is trembling.

  2. Use details to show emotion. Think of how your viewpoint character is feeling at the time, and then choose details that fit that emotion. For instance, if your character is feeling depressed, she might only see the grey of the pavement, or the cold of the day, rather than the flower blooming in a garden near her or a bird singing from a tree.

  3. Use details that will make your story seem believable. Details that are accurate, that show the writer knows the subject, can give the story credibility and can keep the reader in the world of the story.

  4. Use details that rely on all of your senses; don't just use details that rely on sight. Incorporating details that are described by touch, taste, sound, and smell, as well as sight, gives your writing a richer flavour and makes your writing stronger. You can also incorporate the lack of a sense as a powerful story detail—the lack of sound or smell or sight can evoke strong emotion.

  5. Use details to bring the reader more into the story. Instead of saying "It was a stormy night," show the rain pounding on the pavement and pinging against the windows, let the reader feel the air gusting through the streets, let them see how dark the sky is, how the air smells.
Details can be effective in making your story more vivid, believable, and gripping. But use them sparingly—don't dump in details for everything your character sees and hears, or pile detail upon detail about the same thing (unless you're going for that effect in a paragraph). Too many details clumped together can make boring reading, and slow the story down. But try to use enough details so that the reader feels like they are a part of the story, and that the story is real.

Look over your manuscript and see whether there are areas you can add in details to make something general become specific or more vivid in the reader's mind. A few details might just be the missing component you need to bring your story to life.

©Cheryl Rainfield, 2003

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